Loved this, Meg. It takes me back to the days when I used to wear too much cologne and spent an inordinate amount of time thinking about women's underwear. What a mysterious, forbidden place Victoria's Secret was in the middle of a mall. A little island of socially acceptable lust wadded up in piles of panties overflowing bargain bins...
Now class, in short story writing, it’s very important to to hook the reader from the very beginning. For example, this first line of a story called Breadcrumbs by Meg Oolders:
“I was the girl who left her panties in Ryan Kirkland’s pickup truck.”
"I was the girl who left her panties in Ryan Kirkland’s pickup truck." Without a doubt, one of the best opening lines I have ever read. Who would not want to continue reading this story??
"Dude. So hot." Meg! You have these teens' language utterly. "top-shelf junior guys"... "an aggressively flirtatious smile" ... "I wasn’t the girl who kissed yesses out of seniors "... "The girl with flammable underwear." A delight from first sentence to last.
Just apply a small flame, and you'll have a fiery Romance. Every page will burn with passion, and every word will be hot. Every dialogue will be flammable.
What a completely fun and sweet story! Loved reading that Meg! Written in your usual smooth, breezy style. You need to get all of these into a book. I’d buy.
Breadcrumbs
I leave my underwear all over the house, but my wife doesn't think it constitutes flirting.
I loved the ending, Meg. Excellent work. 😁
It's a good thing I haven't had coffee yet, else said coffee would be all over my keyboard from giggling.
That was a really fun story
BB..... beyond brilliant.....
Loved this, Meg. It takes me back to the days when I used to wear too much cologne and spent an inordinate amount of time thinking about women's underwear. What a mysterious, forbidden place Victoria's Secret was in the middle of a mall. A little island of socially acceptable lust wadded up in piles of panties overflowing bargain bins...
Now class, in short story writing, it’s very important to to hook the reader from the very beginning. For example, this first line of a story called Breadcrumbs by Meg Oolders:
“I was the girl who left her panties in Ryan Kirkland’s pickup truck.”
Does that make you want to hear more?
Yes please.
Love this! I love all the teenage angst without actually having to experience it all over again. 😁
October 8th sounds like the perfect day for a black tie Stock Fiction event! 💃🏻
Oh, that story had me flinching. Shame is a great topic topic for short stories.
I just found you. This is terrific writing.
"I was the girl who left her panties in Ryan Kirkland’s pickup truck." Without a doubt, one of the best opening lines I have ever read. Who would not want to continue reading this story??
"Dude. So hot." Meg! You have these teens' language utterly. "top-shelf junior guys"... "an aggressively flirtatious smile" ... "I wasn’t the girl who kissed yesses out of seniors "... "The girl with flammable underwear." A delight from first sentence to last.
Great story told masterfully and fun yo read!
Just apply a small flame, and you'll have a fiery Romance. Every page will burn with passion, and every word will be hot. Every dialogue will be flammable.
What a completely fun and sweet story! Loved reading that Meg! Written in your usual smooth, breezy style. You need to get all of these into a book. I’d buy.
One of the best opening lines I’ve read in a long time! What a lovely and fun story, Meg. Thanks for sharing this gem!
You’re really, really good at this. Hooked, entertained, surprised, delighted. I love the way you write, and I love the stories you tell.