That was fantastic.
“But your hand over his was enough to send grateful blood rushing to his cheeks. And anywhere else it pleased to rush.” -whoahwhoahwhoah
Breathtaking, Meg. I was completely immersed from the first line.
It took me a minute to realize why this one flowed different - using 'you' as the pronoun! It fits this story so well. I can't wait to see what you've got up your sleeve for the rest of February.
This scared me way more than the cat!
I'm not being selfish at all when I say, I love your words. Oh. and "Hello" !
Quite impressive, young lady.
Sheesh. Like watching a timelapse of slow motion train wreck. I thought you said horror wasn’t your genre.
What a beautifully real story. I loved the rhythm of it and the callbacks. I enjoyed it very much.
I'm glad I landed here, referred from Substack's Thursday lurk, via Tom P's Out Over My Skis...whose rules and voice I like, though not fast engines. I will read more of your surprises with pleasure. Thanks.
Thank you, thank you, thank you. Great story, emotionally engaging.
And in the spirit of learning, off to check out second person POV and 'callbacks'