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That was fantastic.

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“But your hand over his was enough to send grateful blood rushing to his cheeks. And anywhere else it pleased to rush.” -whoahwhoahwhoah

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Breathtaking, Meg. I was completely immersed from the first line.

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It took me a minute to realize why this one flowed different - using 'you' as the pronoun! It fits this story so well. I can't wait to see what you've got up your sleeve for the rest of February.

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This scared me way more than the cat!

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I'm not being selfish at all when I say, I love your words. Oh. and "Hello" !

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Feb 6·edited Feb 6Liked by Meg Oolders

Quite impressive, young lady.

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Sheesh. Like watching a timelapse of slow motion train wreck. I thought you said horror wasn’t your genre.

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What a beautifully real story. I loved the rhythm of it and the callbacks. I enjoyed it very much.

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I'm glad I landed here, referred from Substack's Thursday lurk, via Tom P's Out Over My Skis...whose rules and voice I like, though not fast engines. I will read more of your surprises with pleasure. Thanks.

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Thank you, thank you, thank you. Great story, emotionally engaging.

And in the spirit of learning, off to check out second person POV and 'callbacks'

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