Mar 1, 2023·edited Mar 1, 2023Liked by Meg Oolders
JUST Loved it Meg! So much emotion and so palpably packed in with Dawn’s backstory begging to be told. After all WE can't forget she exists. Well done!
I've been waiting for Dawn to be a POV character since it was established she was at the scene of the shootout.
It's a bit refreshing - in this story where, so far everyone but Arnold has been established as a spy, revolutionary, gangster, espionage agent and/or alien cop or weapons merchant - to dive into someone who is...just a girl. Just someone lost and confused (and ready to make some poor choices), but who remains just there. She's just a girl with a crush who fears for her crush.
A very pissed off girl who has run off with a broken beer bottle into a situation beyond her.
Ugh, and she's also right that her parents DO ignore her. Hell, they trained up the brother... If this were a novel we'd get to return to if that is because Kate and Eric discount Dawn as unskilled and useless to their spy games, or if it's because they just wanted one daughter who would be "normal."
But I doubt that's a thread that will be followed by the future authors. This is me catching up on a binge after a missing "next chapter" button got added, but I've already read Simon's chapter and know he doesn't pull it.
But I hope Dawn isn't ret conned into being a spy, agent, alien in parts 9 or 10. The Kate ret con is still the one thing that didn't "flow" quite right for me.
😭 😭 😭 oh Dawn! Love her nickname! Love her determination! Love the ending! Death to cowards!
Ooooooh...Very good!!!
As a teen, I could never resist a "bad boy..."
This is my jam right here.
Noice!!! Fantastic job, Meg. What a great POV. I'm really impressed by everyone's ability to capture the nuances.
Really nice! It’s super fun to see people whose writing styles I know write these stories ... this was quintessentially you. Nice work.
Thrilling. Hooked on every word. Tragic! My heart is breaking for Dawn in that big dirty sweater. Ugh.
JUST Loved it Meg! So much emotion and so palpably packed in with Dawn’s backstory begging to be told. After all WE can't forget she exists. Well done!
I can remember feeling just like that and being told that sort of stuff, so painful you catured it well
Thank you, Kerrie. 💛
I've been waiting for Dawn to be a POV character since it was established she was at the scene of the shootout.
It's a bit refreshing - in this story where, so far everyone but Arnold has been established as a spy, revolutionary, gangster, espionage agent and/or alien cop or weapons merchant - to dive into someone who is...just a girl. Just someone lost and confused (and ready to make some poor choices), but who remains just there. She's just a girl with a crush who fears for her crush.
A very pissed off girl who has run off with a broken beer bottle into a situation beyond her.
Ugh, and she's also right that her parents DO ignore her. Hell, they trained up the brother... If this were a novel we'd get to return to if that is because Kate and Eric discount Dawn as unskilled and useless to their spy games, or if it's because they just wanted one daughter who would be "normal."
But I doubt that's a thread that will be followed by the future authors. This is me catching up on a binge after a missing "next chapter" button got added, but I've already read Simon's chapter and know he doesn't pull it.
But I hope Dawn isn't ret conned into being a spy, agent, alien in parts 9 or 10. The Kate ret con is still the one thing that didn't "flow" quite right for me.