I am not a writer. As a reader, technical details are irrelevant for me. Either it works or it doesn't, and it does. Feeling neither over- nor under-informed, just riding the wave and loving it.
A good change of pace chapter that kept the momentum of the previous episodes.
I still can't quite figure out Celeste, but that could be my defective Y chromosome.
I'm not a fan of time jumps in really any format, but one (obvious) way to anchor the reader might be simply to put dates atop each section(e.g., Fall 2022, Spring 2023, etc.)
If I may be so bold......
I am not a writer. As a reader, technical details are irrelevant for me. Either it works or it doesn't, and it does. Feeling neither over- nor under-informed, just riding the wave and loving it.
The time jumps are challenging for me, but I understand it is a work in progress. Some great stuff here:
"But the least the cultists could do was give their robot doppelgangers a functioning cock." Fiirst priority if you ask me...
“Did Renata clean my office today?” “I think we need to let Renata go,” Ah. Curious clues...
Hornets? HORNETS!!?
A good change of pace chapter that kept the momentum of the previous episodes.
I still can't quite figure out Celeste, but that could be my defective Y chromosome.
I'm not a fan of time jumps in really any format, but one (obvious) way to anchor the reader might be simply to put dates atop each section(e.g., Fall 2022, Spring 2023, etc.)
“Celeste allowed young Harold to stoke her feminine fire” - ah, so she’s a redhead
Love it! I too believe that robot dopplegangers should be "fully functional" LOL :)